First off, I have to say how much I admire you right now. This is one of the best manuscripts I’ve ever read, and I’m a pretty big literary snob, so I hope you take those kudos to heart and wear the solid gold star (I RARELY award anyone) with pride until the goo rubs off the edges and it starts to curl. Then smooth the damn thing out and keep showcasing it because
damn, girl you’ve got some writing chops!
I also don’t usually include very detailed cover letters (other than a broad thumbs-up or down) with such a straight forward proofread, but this manuscript impacted me so much as a fellow writer, and someone who has struggled with weight loss and gain since my late teens, that I have to touch on its strengths because I genuinely feel like I just connected with a kindred spirit, and I think the majority of your readers will feel the same.
You’re funny as hell. Your grasp of comedic writing is spot-on— that stood out to me immediately in the initial sample you sent and played a big part in my wanting to work with you. And that alone could launch and carry a wildly successful writing career.
But what really makes this manuscript shine is how raw you are.
You’re inspiringly straightforward and refreshingly honest. It’s such a relief! There is absolutely nothing “plastic” or superficial about your story and it’s truly compelling. You may have held something back, but this manuscript certainly doesn’t read like
This is the book that overweight people—men and women—have been waiting for.
Your introspection and insights on the emotion-driven reasons for over-eating, and how we process everything that comes afterward, is spot on. Sure, we all experience nuanced variations, but you literally pulled up alongside the very lonely, weight-loss deprived island we’re each sitting on driving a yacht, blew the horn, and yelled,
“Hey! I know a better way, and it doesn’t involve fad diets or self-loathing. It may not even involve weight loss, but if you embrace it you’ll feel a helluva lot better about yourself afterward and that might result in weight loss.”
I absolutely adore the way you talked about your relationships— the acceptance and rejection—and your sex life. This is such an important message to deliver for both sides of the conversation. But most importantly, again, you were gritty and raw. You didn’t hide your regrets—you chose which to share wisely, and it organically makes us trust and celebrate in the beautiful, confidence building moments.
The eight-year online relationship story reads brilliantly at breakneck speed—I COULD NOT “put the book down,” so to speak.
You offer amazing advice and tips on self-care and various weight loss plans. What you went through (and are still going through) due to the gastric band surgery was gut-wrenching (no pun intended).
The most important message overall, though, is “You’re Not Alone.”
And you’ve nailed it. I trust you. Your readers will trust you.
The pressure of that may result in a cry for a book on the life-changes that finally get you to your goal, and how you manage maintaining that, but however you decide to handle the follow up, the truthfulness of your debut on this topic will garner a lifelong readership.